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The graph below gives information about the number of cases of diarrhea in Mashhad between 1983 and 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the number of cases of diarrhea in Mashhad between 1983 and 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates how the number of
cases
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 of
diarrhoea
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 changed over a period between 1983 and 1992 in Mashhad. It is observed that in the first
year
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 (1983) the number of
cases
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 of
diarrhoea
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 stood at 100 and remained stable until 1985.
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 was followed by a slight increase in two years until it reached approximately 200.
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, there was a significant drop in 1988 when the figures were 100.
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 downward trend was suddenly broken and the number of
cases
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 of
diarrhoea
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 grew up dramatically and showed 400
cases
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 per
year
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.
This
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 figure maintained unchanged until 1991.
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, in 1992 the
cases
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 of
diarrhoea
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 were equal to zero.
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, the proportion of
diarrhoea
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 in Mashhad
last
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year
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 was the lowest in other years, but the highest result was in 1998 with 400
cases
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 per
year
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cases, diarrhoea, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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