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What are the advantages and disadvantages of working in same place as other members of your family? Give reasons or examples to support your opinion?

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After WHO released a statement that Covid 19 was a global pandemic, many companies created a policy for their employees to
work
 from
home
instead
 of going to the
office
 to slow down the spread of
virus
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.
Although
 today Covid 19 is not dangerous as before, some companies like mine still apply the policy about
work
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working
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 from
home
.
Furthermore
, it makes us
to
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work
 with our family and we have more
time
 to meet with them. For some
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people
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peoples
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 it might be a benefit, but others will disagree about it.
This
 essay will explain
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 and advantages of working from
home
 with family members. The major benefit of working from
home
 is we don’t have to spend much money as we do if we go to the
office
. Some
peoples
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people
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 maybe rent an apartment or room near their
office
 and sometimes it is very expensive. But if we
work
 from
home
, we can use the money to save or to use it for another expense. It will save our money for household needs. Another advantage is we don’t have to face
the
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traffic jams.
For instance
, in Jakarta the jam
time
 is around 6 AM until 8 AM and
in
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at
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 5 PM until 8 PM, if we
work
 from
home
, we can spend our travel
time
 to the
office
 to do
another activity
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other activities
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 with our family members like walking with kids, make
a
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apply
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breakfast, and we can play with brothers and sisters or with children in the middle of our rest
time
.
On the other hand
, some
people
 maybe not
having
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have
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good
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a good
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 relationship with their family so it will make them feel like they are in prison
instead
 of
location
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a location
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 that we called as
home
. Sometimes it will affect their
work
 productivity.
Moreover
, some
people
 who
has
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 kids maybe have little trouble when they need to join the meeting.
For example
, there is a video
in
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on
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 Youtube about children
enter
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entering
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 their
father
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father's
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 room in the middle of
important
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an important
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 meeting and they break their father’s concentration. In
this
 situation, it will be better to ask another family member to
taking
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take
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 care of
children
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the children
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 when there is a meeting
schedule
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. Clearly, some
peoples
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people
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 will agree with the regulation of working from
home
 and some
people
 will
against
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be against
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 that policy.
People
 should separate and manage their family
time
 and their
work
time
 so both of them can run properly.
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