The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in australia. Sumerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparations where relevant

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in australia. Sumerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparations where relevant
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The pie chart and table given offer insights into how many
travelers
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from more than 3 countries there were, how long and where they stayed, and what they did at a particular holiday resort, based on the data collected in Australia. From an overview, the most striking feature is that
European
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visitors
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held the
predominent
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predominant
proportion, compared to the others. It is
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evident that there was a remarkable disparity in their choices. Regarding the information pertaining to the pie chart,
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European
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was ranked at the top tier, with 37%, followed by the US and other countries. The former accounted for 35%,
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the latter was responsible for 18%. Meanwhile, Asia registered a minuscule share
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10%. As far as the figures in the table are concerned, the staying duration of
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and American
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was about more than 14 days, which is followed by other-regional
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(10 days) and Asian
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(7 days).
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both Asia and the US chose hotels, albeit
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different standards,
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from Asia and other regions shared the same idea about accommodation which is camping and caravan.
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, the primary activity of Asian and American
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is sightseeing,
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European
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visitors
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chose swimming and sunbathing and the rest
visitors
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chose surfing.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words european, visitors with synonyms.
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