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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
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The given maps illustrate several proposed changes in the small town called Lslip.
Overall
Linking Words
, it is
cleared
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clear
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 that a ring
road
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 will be
establised
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established
 and the main
road
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 will
be transfer
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be transferred
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 to
an
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a
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 pedestrian zone. Looking for the map as it is now, there is a main
road
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that runs
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runs
Wrong verb form
running
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 through
of
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apply
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the
towm
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town
from east to west.
In addition
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, a park is situated
on
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in
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the
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southeast area
while
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 a school settled
on
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in
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 the southwest . After development, the main
road
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 will be a pedestrian street and vehicles will drive in a dual carriageway which is around the town centre.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, shops now are placed
in
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on
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the
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apply
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both
side
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sides
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 of the main
road
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, and
housing
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the housing
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 area is south of these establishments. In the second picture, stores on the north of the
pedistrian
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pedestrian
 street will be replaced by a bus station, shopping centre, car park and new housing
while
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 shops
of
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on
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south
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the south
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 will remain the same place.
Additionally
Linking Words
, it seems that the size of
a
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the
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 park will be reduced for more accommodations, and the school will be the only building
which
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apply
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situated
at
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apply
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the
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apply
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outside of the ring
road
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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