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Nowadays, with the advancement of technology and transportation facilities, people can work and live anywhere they want. Discuss its advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

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There is a wide variety
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 about the location of accommodation. Some folk would rather live in the city,
while
 some people prefer to live in the suburb. In
this
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both sides of
this
 view and say my notion. On the one hand, there are those who subscribe to the view that there are several merits
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 living in the inner-city area. They insist that the folk who reside in the city have a better life compared with other
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places place
. The accessibility to amenities
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public transport, plaza, and restaurants is very easier than
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in other
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 regions.
Furthermore
, the majority of administrative offices are
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downtown
hence
, the employees are able to arrive
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 their
workplace
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 quickly.
On the other hand
, many commentators justifiably argue that
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 areas are able to
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highly beneficial for reducing anxiety and stress. They have a positive attitude towards that the countryside is the best place to take a rest and be
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 because there is not any pollution
such
 as noise pollution or contaminated air.
Moreover
,
natural
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the natural
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 view is amazing in that area for
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, the moment of sunrise or sunset. It is very suitable for bringing a inspire. In conclusion,
although
 there are some positive aspects
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 living in the suburb, I personally believe it is better to reside in the city. The main issue for workers is able to arrive
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 their destination easily and quickly.
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 we are unable to not consider the effect of access to some public places to
rise
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raise
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 the standard of living.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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