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you have not seen a close friend for a very long time. You also still have a few of your friend's belongings that were left at your house the last time she visited. 1. Why your are writing 2. what you have been doing since you last spoke together3. Apologize for still have the items and ask how you can return them.

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Dear Emma, I hope you are great and enjoying your
time
 there. It's been a
while
 since we've seen each other. The
last
time
, when you visited me you left your books and some clothes at my place. A few days ago, I was trying to arrange my closet when I found one bag there. I opened it and I noticed that your books and clothes were in it. I was wondering why I didn't check it earlier. Since, the
last
time
 we met I have been extremely busy with my new
project
 as you know my job is quite awkward timings.
Also
, there were tremendous tasks which I had to complete within the deadline.
Also
, we discussed my new
project
 in our
last
 meeting and you know how imperative
this
project
 is for me because it took a lot of perseverance to get
this
project
. So, I was extremely puzzled
in
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 my schedule and I didn't write anything to you. I am terribly sorry for still keeping your items as they are quite personal. Maybe you needed them. I am willing to send them through courier with a fast delivery option or I can hand over them to my uncle He will drop them at your place
according to
 your suitable
time
. Just let me know in which way you are comfortable so that, I would be able to send your belongings. I hope to hear from you soon. With love, Jasvir
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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to enhance clarity by using more varied sentence structures. This will help convey your ideas more smoothly.
Task Achievement
Include a clearer introduction regarding the purpose of your letter. This helps set the context from the beginning.
General Advice
Pay attention to some minor grammatical inaccuracies, but don't worry too much as they do not affect the overall understanding.
Task Achievement
You successfully cover all the points required by the task.
Coherence and Cohesion
You use good transitional phrases, such as 'Since the last time we met...'.
Coherence and Cohesion
The apology and solution for returning the belongings were expressed well, showing empathy and responsibility.

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