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Nowadays most of the crimes are done by youngsters what are the causes of this and what solutions can be taken??

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At the present time, the youth crime rate is much higher than before and there are many critical reasons for that. In
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 that cause it and illustrate solutions The two main causes of youth crime’s increase are inappropriate upbringing and wrong content on the
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. There are seen deteriorations
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 most life aspects
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 the growth of
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 importance in
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’s lives. It affected parentage a lot.
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, when the child is crying
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 tend to give them phones and let them watch whatever they want online,
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 of understanding the problem.
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, children won’t come to talk with their parents, because of a lack of attention. It provides trauma that may be the reason for future criminal acts.
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, there are seen the impact of the
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 that allows felonious content. As an example, we can find a lot of misguided
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 as terroristic groups. They can easily brainwash everyone and make them commit crimes. The young generation is addicted to the
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 and spends the most time there, that’s why they are most vulnerable in
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 situation. Some possible solutions are explaining to parents about correct upbringing, telling everywhere about manipulations on the
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 and cyber security. In my opinion, every person should be taught about care after a child and what’s wrong or correct.
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 way we can prevent abuse in families. It’s essential to build a healthy society.
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 with serious problems in mental health cannot grow up normally. The second solution is to warn
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 about those groups and say how they work. Not every person knows about safety online, they can share personal information and fall into blackmail.
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, I can say that it’s important to clarify even simple
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 to
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. Massive problems start with small
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. So, we should care more about younger and talk a lot.
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