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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the percentages of time that had been spent
by
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unemployment in British based on gender and
wake up
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 time
last
 year.
Overall
, a glance at the picture provided reveals that the majority of women in
morning
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the morning
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 and afternoon did housework activities after they got up,
while
 the opposite only morning men
dominanced
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dominated
 to hunt the job and the
other
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others
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 just
watching
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 TV.
To begin
, as a jobless, 22% of males unemployed started their day in the morning to look for occupation, followed by shopping and housework as their other actions, which had a slightly similar number at around 19%.
In contrast
, afternoon males
had
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the
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preferred
to
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watching TV
than
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to
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hunting
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 job, which had the highest proportions among all categories at 14%.
On the contrary
, a plethora of females, who had not a job, had a significant portion
to
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did housework at almost half and 21% respectively. And
then
, they had
a similar patterns
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a similar pattern
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,
which
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in which
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 shopping was their next beloved activity.
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