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Some people think that scientific work on plants and animals is good. Others think it is dangerous. Discuss both views.

These days,
research
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 development about the beneficial effects of plants and
animals
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is
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are hugely increase
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.
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 it has several potential risks to human beings, the merits
from
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research
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 on living
creatures
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 could help
human
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humans
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especially
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 in
health
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the health
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 aspect.
This
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 essay will elaborate
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on these
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these two point
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this two point
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 of
views
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view
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 about scientific work on plants and
animals
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. Earth
provide
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 human
a
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lot of advantages
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plans
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and plans
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 and
animals
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 to be consumed, yet only 5%
plan
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of plan
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 in
this
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 world were identified.
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, not only
to
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be consumed but
also
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they
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have nice components and vitamins for increasing
human's
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human
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 health, we know
it
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them
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 as plan medicine. Ginger,
for instance
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,
it
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apply
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has a lot of beneficial substances for
individual's
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an individual's
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 body and has a warming effect.
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, several
people
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 believed that snake's blood will heal
people
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 with cancer,
while
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 until now
researcher
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researchers
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 in medicine have not
gave
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 any strong statement yet about
this
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.
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,
due to
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 reduce the hoax news and avoiding society consume
wrong
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the wrong
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 parts of wild
creatures
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, researchers play a
pivot
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 role to identify and give validation of consumption.
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, it has
potential
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 dangerous since there are many
creatures
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 that predicted will extinct.
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,
reseachers
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researchers
 might unlock poisonous substances from
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plans
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plants
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 or
animals
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 and
community
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the community
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 will use
it
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them
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 for their own needs.
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, in certain
region
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regions
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 in Indonesia,
people
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 eat a poisonous flower to
sucide
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suicide
. Even though by
publish
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 the list of dangerous
plans
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 or
animals
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, individuals could use it for
wrong
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the wrong
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 aims.
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 wild
creatures
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also
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are also
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in
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apply
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dangerous because researchers published a statement that they have huge
benefit
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benefits
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 to heal severe illnesses.
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, inventions and
research
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 about
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creatures
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creatures'
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 potential benefit will
turns
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turn
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 into disaster, if the government did not establish a strict rule. In conclusion,
human
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humans
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 need
researcher
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researchers
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 to identify all
kind
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kinds
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 of
plans
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 and
animals
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 to ensure their safety. Meanwhile, these scientific works could trigger bad
people
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 to do illegal things. Unless the government take
this
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 seriously, our
research
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 environment on living
creatures
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 will always have dangerous potential.

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