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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Doing for a charity event, developing the
neighborhood
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, or teaching sports
activities
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 to younger children, which are voluntary
services
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, should be a major part of high school subjects that many
people
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 argue about it. Personally, I fully agree with that statement
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 the fact that serving unpaid community
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 could
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 bring advantages for the children,
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 as developing their empathy
skills
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 and exploring their interests and
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, which I will discuss in
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 essay. First of all, working for free group
services
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 could develop the juveniles' empathy
skills
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.
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 could be essential learning for children regarding helping each other and understanding what other
people
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 feel and think.
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, when flooding happens, many
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 need help to move to another place to live safely.
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, they need assistance for getting their primary needs,
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 as food, drinks, and clothes. To help
people
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 who suffer from flooding disasters,
students
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 might do a charity project to support the
people
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's assistance and needs.
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, doing unpaid community
services
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 could
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 improve the children’s interests,
strengths
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, and intelligence. Adolescence is the age group for
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 who looking for their self-identity by trying many
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 they want to do. They could consider and decide what they like, are interested in, and know their strength by joining voluntary
activities
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.
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, when a student actively participates and like to do social
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,
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 as teaching physical education to their friends voluntarily, it might be she/ he has an interest in voluntary service and
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 has
strengths
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 in interpersonal
skills
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.
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, she/ he will
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 improve her/ him communication
skills
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.
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, I believe that unpaid community
services
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 could be advantageous for
students
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 in compulsory high school subjects. It is because voluntary programs might improve the
students
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' empathy
skills
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 and explore their interests,
strengths
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, and abilities.
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