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Some people think that the internet has brought people together while others think that people have become more isolated now.

#people #internet
Many individuals think social
medias
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interactions
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 with each
others
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while
 others have been mentioning more
people
 are interrupted from real life. In my view, the
internet
 is an important tool for bringing
people
 closer to each
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.
One
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of
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the other hand, nowadays most
of
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young
people
 spend a lot of time
to
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 the social
medias
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media
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this
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because they
watching
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 different long videos and play games.
As a
result
, they forget real life.
Along with
this
, social media users stay along
th
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the
 reason they connected to the
medias
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media
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.
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result
 they become less
communicate
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with othe
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othe
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other
people
.
Secondly
, using the
internet
most
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 popular among young
people
 because everyone
chooosing
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choosing
 the using websites and it
help
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to
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people
 with
among
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relationships
to
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with
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the
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other
people
.
For instance
,
personally
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 I often visit the
internet
 in order to
chatting
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withy
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with
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close
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my close
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 friends and
contacting
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contact
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relartionships
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relationships
.
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The
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result
, everybody
become
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 friendly.
Apart from
this
, making new friends because different individuals visit the
internet
 .
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result
, website users
maybe
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making
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acquaintance
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acquaintances
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new
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with new
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 friends and
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have conversation
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conversation
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conversations
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 together
at
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on
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social
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on social
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 media. In summary, using the
internet
 can offer
number
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 of
convenients
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conveniences
 to
people
.
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