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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#internet #books #air #tickets #groceries
The usage of
internet
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the internet
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 has grown rapidly over the years.
Likewise
 purchasing
of
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items like books or tickets online has become most these days .
This
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whether pros dominate cons .
People
 got used to
easy
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an easy
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 lifestyle. They want
every thing
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everything
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 near to their doorstep without taking stress. Many
e commerce
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e-commerce
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 websites advertistied
thir
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their
company
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companies
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 with
this
 idea as their agenda.
As a
result
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result,
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their
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there
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 is huge demand for online shopping . Companies announce
clearence
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clearance
 sales and discounts to attract customers .
Cost
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 will
also
 be less
in
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online because there will be
elimination
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the elimination
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 of
maintaince
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maintenance
cost
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costs
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 of physical stores. Back in
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the days
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day
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days
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days,
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people
 needed to go to travel agents to book tickets but these days we can book
airplane
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aeroplane
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 tickets through apps without
need
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the need
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of
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for
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middle men
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middlemen
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.
This
 is
advantage
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an advantage
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 to us because
cost
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the cost
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 will
too
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be too
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 low as you are directly dealing with
company
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the company
a company
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 and
also
comfort
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comfortable
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. Job tensions and hectic
worklife
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work
doesnot
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do not
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 allow
people
 so
people
 tend freely relax without the worry of going to physical stores.
For
example
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example,
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 many apps like
amazon
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Amazon
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,
flipcart
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Flipkart
flipchart
,
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and bigbasket
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bigbasket
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BigBasket
big basket
 customer engagement rose
subsequently
 and revenue is projected to grow over
next
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the next
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 10 years.
Every thing
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Everything
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 comes with a price
,
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apply
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 Like these sites are more prone to
cyber attacks
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cyber-attacks
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. We need to be careful with children as
needs
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need
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 to be carefully monitored , they may go into
site
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the site
a site
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 and buy whatever they see because the application already has presaved card details and one tap is enough for the money to detect. We may
also
 encounter many links which are malicious and when opened device gets hacked .
For
example
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example,
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 there article in
paper
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the paper
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 where
boy
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a boy
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 ordered toys worth 1000 dollars
in
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on
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amazon
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Amazon
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,
when
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and when
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 the parent got terrified he was shocked In conclusion , the advantages doesnot dominate
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the disadvantage
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disadvantage
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disadvantages
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, most
of
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apply
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security apps
these
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apply
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prevent opening malicious links and
user
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users
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 must be aware of
onlne
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online
 transactions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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