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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills Do you agree or disagree

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Education
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 system is taking a new reformation in recent days; It is being argued
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some
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that starting from elementary to university, schools are concentrating on teaching theoretical
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instead
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 of practical
skills
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. In my opinion, either of these should be equally treated, because many of the corporates nowadays are looking for more personality
skills
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. Perhaps, it is equally important to learn about the process without which the core aspect of the field one cannot expertise in his career. First of all, I believe that only with the help of practical
skills
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 we would know how to survive the outside world. Indeed, nowadays there are many professions where they require at least a
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 experience as an intern.
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, it is a school’s duty to teach
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discipline and communication
skills
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 which
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 a major part in developing individual personality.
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, In India where I live, there was a subject called moral science where it teaches good and bad deeds and many
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the
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inspiring life lessons regarding discipline and punctuality, but during the recent reformation in
2010
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 our government
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removed the subject from
education
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 system. Unequivocally, only learning practical
skills
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 without any book
knowledge
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also
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 does not make us fit for any field. If an individual
need
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to
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an
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expertise in a specific field it is important for them
acquire
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knowledge
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 of the same
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 as doctors, engineers,
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.
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, only if we learn it theoretically, we can implement it in
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practice
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.
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, A doctor cannot treat a patient without book
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, so if he needs to get his license as a certified doctor, he needs to have both practical
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 and
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theoretical.
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, Schools should be reformed their teaching in either way. It is important that kids should learn within the books and the outside, only
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 it would be easy for them to survive to achieve their dreams.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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