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Your city council is planning to pull down one of the historic buildings in your town because they do not have funds to renovate it. As a citizen, you do not want it to happen. Write a letter to the city council. In your letter, say what the importance of this historic building is mention why it should be renovated rather than pull down suggest a plan to raise funds and maintain the building in the future Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am Noah, a citizen of England who resides in North Hampshire and I am writing
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 letter as a request to prevent the demolition of one of the historic buildings in our town which is known as the Liberty Museum. As I know, the building has a history of over two centuries and it represents the struggles of the local communities and their cultural evolution. Every year
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 of tourists visit here to explore the surroundings and to study the ancient sculpture and knitting technologies invented
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 time ago. The people around
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 building depend on the income brought by these tourists and destroying the building could completely collapse the sources of income that they depend on to survive.
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, I would like to suggest that writing a letter to the prime minister or a local businessman regarding
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 issue could bring awareness and might help to collect funds through online platforms and regular exhibitions as it might help to maintain
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 historic monument that represents our city and help to maintain the economy in our town. I hope you will take
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 to preserve
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 important historic building in our town. Yours faithfully, Noah
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coherence cohesion
Your letter is well-structured and each paragraph focuses on a single idea, which is excellent for coherence. However, you could strengthen your argument by providing a bit more detail on why the building itself is historically significant, perhaps by mentioning any specific landmark events or famous figures associated with it.
task achievement
You've addressed the task very well, covering all points comprehensively. Yet, to further improve your score, consider elaborating a bit more on your suggested plan for raising funds, and include actionable steps that make the proposal more concrete.
greeting and closing
The letter opening and closing are excellently done, with appropriate levels of formality and a clear statement of purpose.
logical structure
You have presented a well-organized letter with a logical sequence of ideas that makes it easy to follow your argument.
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