The bar chart provides data on the number of biths given per woman in 6 Gulf countries in 2 seperate years 1990 and 2000.
The bar chart compares the number of births each
woman
in six countries ( Bahrain
, Kuwayt
, Qatar, Correct your spelling
Kuwait
Oman
, S. Arabia
, UAE
) between 1990 and 2000.
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and UAE
Overall
, it can be seen that Oman
and S. Arabia
had the highly
rates in both years. Change the adverb
high
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apply
Bahrain
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each Change preposition
apply
years
.
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year
Oman
was about births per woman
in1990
. The figure for S. Correct your spelling
in 1990
Arabia
was slightly lower, but still much highest than other country
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countries
make up
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makeup
woman
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women
while
Bahrain
and Kuvayt organise about 3.5 same year
. Qatar and UAE reached approximately four. Change to a plural noun
years
Further
, Oman
and S. Arabia
fairly declined to over five births given by a woman
in 2000 , a fall around 3 other countries witnessed only a major drop in the number of children given birth by one woman
in 2000.Thw
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The
Bahrain
decreased from over three to two birtha
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births
birth
woman
in 2000 while
UAE dropped from four to three within the same period time.Submitted by ieltsteaching0 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words woman, bahrain, oman, arabia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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