in some areas of the US a curfew is imposed in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult what is your opinion about this?

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aged individuals are not allowed to be outside on the street without an adult companion after a certain time at night.
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restriction may not be beneficial in some circumstances I believe it would bring more advantages. Some people might believe that
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to more disobedience especially dealing with
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. frankly, many teenagers are inclined towards rebellion.
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, a law which
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them may cause more problems than just informing them of the dangers.
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, parents should warn their
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that at night there may be more criminals on the streets and they can abuse vulnerable individuals
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why curfews might not be as functional as they seem, I reckon that it is better to
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them than not. first of all, it will keep
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out of hazardous situations.
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, surely there are criminals
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usually commit crimes at midnight since
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are not as available as days.
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, any vulnerable individual especially kids will be at risk. Second of all, curfews and laws implemented for both
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and adults can lead to
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disciplined society eventually.
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most laws will limit our personal choices,
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of them are for our own good and teach us to be more civilized as
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whole society. including curfews for teenagers who are
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more into rebellious activities which might get them into trouble. In conclusion,
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restrictions will bring more positive outcomes
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as moral lessons and keep us in a safer environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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