Some people think the housing shortage in big cities is caused by relevant policies so this problem can be solved by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Introduction

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living in

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city

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think the housing

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is caused by

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government

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policies

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However

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, I agree with

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because I am living in

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governmet

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made

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shortage

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that

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many

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can not afford a

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Body paragraph 1

Many

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could not afford a

house

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because of high rising pricing, buying a new

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cost lot of money because of material cost and many more but the

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is the highest. More than fifty

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of the

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price is the

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, the

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making

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tax

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so high the

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can not afford a

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. To stop the housing

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the

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government

should take less

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and

facilliate

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facilitate

for

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the citizen

buying

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new

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Body paragraph 2

Living in a big

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there

are

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not much land to build

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house

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a house

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so the price of land

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high

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can not pay for

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Many

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westen

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western

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thier

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their

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making

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many

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, population dispersion

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good example because making scatter of the

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is a way the help the

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and helping less housing

shortage

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. The

government

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should have many

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to help the

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to spread out the population the

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county side so the housing

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would

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Conclusion

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shortage

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could

be fix

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with the help of the

government

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, the problem is the

government

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policies

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, they could lower the

tax

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and give more

policies

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helping

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the citizen the having a

house

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Jun 19, 2023

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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238 words

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