Some people think the housing shortage in big cities is caused by relevant policies so this problem can be solved by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Many
citizen
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citizens
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living in
big
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the big
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city
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cities
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think the housing
shortage
is caused by
the
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apply
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government
policies
.
However
, I agree with
this
because I am living in
big
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a big
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city
a
governmet
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government
policies
made
housing
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a housing
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shortage
that
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apply
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many
people
can not afford a
house
. Many
people
could not afford a
house
because of high rising pricing, buying a new
house
cost lot of money because of material cost and many more but the
tax
costing
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is the highest. More than fifty
percent
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of the
house
price is the
tax
, the
government
making
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tax
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taxes
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so high the
people
can not afford a
house
. To stop the housing
shortage
the
govornment
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government
should take less
tax
and
facilliate
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facilitate
for
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apply
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the citizen
buying
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to buy
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new
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a new
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house
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houses
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. Living in a big
city
there
are
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is
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not much land to build
house
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a house
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so the price of land
so
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is so
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high
people
can not pay for
living
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a living
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.
Many
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westen
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western
country
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countries
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thier
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their
government
making
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make
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many
policies
, population dispersion
the a
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the
a
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good example because making scatter of the
city
is a way the help the
city
and helping less housing
shortage
. The
government
should have many
policies
to help the
city
to spread out the population the
the
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county side so the housing
shortage
would
be fix
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be fixed
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. The housing
shortage
could
be fix
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be fixed
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with the help of the
government
, the problem is the
government
policies
, they could lower the
tax
and give more
policies
to
helping
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help
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the citizen the having a
house
.
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