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Nowadays, many buildings have open and common rooms instead of separate and enclosed ones. What can be the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays, many buildings have open and common rooms
instead
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 of separate and enclosed ones.
This
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 essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
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 trend.
Firstly
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, the advantages of
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 open
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 trend like
this
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 will make the workplace or the house bigger with more
space
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, help
people
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 feel relaxed
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 an open
space
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, and that can help a lot for children because kids living in an open
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 so can expose many things.
Secondly
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, in a big
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 at
work
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, the worker can easier communicate with each other or
people
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 can see
people
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 with their problems and help
people
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 with their
work
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 and
work
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 it out together, and in a family,
people
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 can live together in a big family. On another hand, the disadvantage of these open rooms it
people
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 will not feel comfortable with their personal
space
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 because
they
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room
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 aren't separate so the personal
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 there will
no
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not
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 more for
people
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 who are living or working. Because they
work
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 in a big
space
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 so the noise will go aground the holding area and
people
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 can't focus at
work
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 are
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family
member
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 can not rest because there is always noise in the house. In conclusion, open and common rooms
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 of separate and enclosed ones can have many advantages and disadvantages of
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 trend.
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