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living in a country where you have to speak foreign language can cause a series social problems as well as practical problems extent do you agree or disagree

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Living in an environment where you are not speaking your mother's
language
 is prone to various technical and cultural issues.
While
people
 may argue that exposing ourselves
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new
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 culture and
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language
have
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 potential long-term benefits, I personally believe that
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 barrier can be serious
obstacles
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, both socially and practically in any kind of relationship with the locals. In
this
 essay, I would like to explain my view on those problems.
To begin
 with,
language
 is more than just about a set of rules,
grammars
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, or
vocabularies
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. Beyond that,
language
 shapes the cultures and habits in which
people
 communicate with others.
Therefore
, certain words can be deemed as a polite expression in one culture
,
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 but can refer to a totally different meaning in other places. These differences can trigger social problems,
for example
, when
people
 unknowingly
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 racial slurs that
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 a social conflict between immigrants and locals.
On the other hand
, speaking in
foreign
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language
 can cause difficulties in creating deep personal relationships. Regardless of the level of proficiency, expressing true emotions and ideas will be more challenging if
people
 are not
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native speakers of that
language
.
This
 can cause loneliness
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 may lead to anxiety and depression.
To sum up
, I agree that residing in a country where speaking
in
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a foreign
language
 is not an option can trigger a lot of issues, mainly in the way we keep
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harmony with the locals and build deep personal connections with others.
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