Essay type:Discussion Theme: Some people feel that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is a better in the countryside.

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My essay: It is widely argued that
city
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life
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is more comfortable,
however
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, others opine that living suburbs is better.
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,
while
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living in a
city
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is beneficial for people, countryside inhabitants live
more
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a more
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interesting
life
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. On the one hand, there are facilities and comfortable amenities in big cities. Because modern
city
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houses and apartments are supplied
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electricity and water supply.
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,
city
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life
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requires
21 century
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comforts and modern technological devices.
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can lead to many individuals do not face to a lot of difficulties. Another better side of living in
a cities
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cities
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would be
well
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education system. Professionals,
knowledgeable
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and knowledgeable
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persons teach students
in
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there.
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,
wide
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range of modern schools,
universities
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and universities
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where
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were
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located in big
city
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centres.
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to
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,
city
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workers earn more and transportation networks are well organized.
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, I strongly believe that living in
a
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countryside is very useful and
convinient
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convenient
.
Majority
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of
population
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the population
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who stay in villages are happy
an
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and
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they are in luck.
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reason is that every day villagers live in beautiful nature, wake up from
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the twitter
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twitter
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of birds, not transports noisy, just like in fairytales.
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, they can see wide fields,
farm lands
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farmlands
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and low roofs. Everybody knows that there are
less
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fewer
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air and water populations. traffic jams. Everything is natural in there.
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,many villagers have got cows and every morning they can drink useful milk.
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, each people become
health
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and energetic. Villagers face to face their neighbours and they are sociable, hospitable and ordinary. Whenever
,
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you can find
good
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a good
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interlocutor.
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, though living in a
city
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more
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is more
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useful, I think that
countryside
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the countryside
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is a good place for
life
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.
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