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Essay type:Discussion Theme: Some people feel that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is a better in the countryside.

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My essay: It is widely argued that
city
life
 is more comfortable,
however
, others opine that living suburbs is better.
Although
,
while
 living in a
city
 is beneficial for people, countryside inhabitants live
more
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a more
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 interesting
life
. On the one hand, there are facilities and comfortable amenities in big cities. Because modern
city
 houses and apartments are supplied
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with
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electricity and water supply.
Also
,
city
life
 requires
21 century
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21-century
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 comforts and modern technological devices.
This
 can lead to many individuals do not face to a lot of difficulties. Another better side of living in
a cities
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cities
a city
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 would be
well
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the well
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 education system. Professionals,
knowledgeable
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and knowledgeable
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 persons teach students
in
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there.
For instance
,
wide
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a wide
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 range of modern schools,
universities
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and universities
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where
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were
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 located in big
city
 centres.
In addition
 to
this
,
city
 workers earn more and transportation networks are well organized.
On the other hand
, I strongly believe that living in
a
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the
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 countryside is very useful and
convinient
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convenient
.
Majority
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The majority
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 of
population
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the population
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 who stay in villages are happy
an
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and
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 they are in luck.
This
 reason is that every day villagers live in beautiful nature, wake up from
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the twitter
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twitter
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Twitter
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of birds, not transports noisy, just like in fairytales.
Moreover
, they can see wide fields,
farm lands
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farmlands
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 and low roofs. Everybody knows that there are
less
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fewer
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air and water populations. traffic jams. Everything is natural in there.
For example
,many villagers have got cows and every morning they can drink useful milk.
As a result
, each people become
health
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 and energetic. Villagers face to face their neighbours and they are sociable, hospitable and ordinary. Whenever
,
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 you can find
good
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a good
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 interlocutor.
To sum up
, though living in a
city
more
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is more
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 useful, I think that
countryside
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the countryside
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 is a good place for
life
 .
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