Some people think that private health care is better for people. Others say that health care should be free of charge and run by the government. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of private health service. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Health
problems are
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main issue in whole notions,
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is very challenging for entire countries. Many individuals think that private hospitals are very well for the masses and others think that authorities gives should pay
fewer
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for
facilities
for
citizen
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citizens
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. So,
here
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is
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many pros and cons of hospitality in private
health
facilities
.
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essay will discuss both views in
this
paragraph. There are many problems related to
health
care services, Let's begin with, If I say about private hospitals service So, that are so advance in the public
health
care.
Moreover
, private healthcare
centre
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use
high-quality machines and unique technology for treatments without any waiting. They bought very costly machines and body equipment from foreign countries and cities because
that is
so easy for them.
However
, They
use
very costly medicine but It is affecting
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patients'
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patients
recovery very soon.
Such
as Kidney transplantation,
For instance
, They get treatment within three months and Private
health
organisations provide 24-hour service or fast.
Additionally
, all private healthcare
centers
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so clean,
hygienic
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and the food quality is too good. The employees take care of
patients
such
as guests or
They
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feel their
patients
comfortable atmosphere. On the second hand, There are many disadvantages to private hospitals Kind
of
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private
health
organisations are providing
facilities
so expensive for normal people
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the reason every mankind did not take benefits.
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, emergency departments
divided
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in
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multiple sessions
according to
the charges. It is
bad
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impact on
patients
,
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thing is not justified because every individual is not capable for that they take costly treatment.
For example
, a Patient survives to critical
health
issue and they have a long time so they approach
to
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private
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the private
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hospital rather than
government
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hospital because
they
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takes an estimated 6
month
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months
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for treatments but the patient did not wait for them.
Nevertheless
,
government
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the government
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should give fast
facilities
and
use
advanced technology used for critical
health
issues
Such
as heart transplantation, and all types of cancer problems. In conclusion, private
health
to cares provide very good services for
peoples
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people
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and
use
medicines too well but treatment is very costly.
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