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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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There is no doubt that these days many rural
people
 move to live in the cities. The question is, is
this
 phenomenon will lead to a positive or negative development? In
this
 essay, I am going to describe reasons
and
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why I think it is a positive development. In terms of causes, most of the
people
 who live in the countryside are struggling with the infrastructure. The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that the transportation systems, all the
people
 there spend hours to arrive at the airport because most of the
time
 it will be in the middle of the cities. To illustrate, all the
people
 who live in Al-Hasa in the KSA, spend two hours more because they don’t have a local airport.
In other words
. They have to add an extra two hours in their flay to be on
time
, but in
all
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the city the rate
of
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the
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road
time
 is half an hour.
Moreover
, most of the global brands do not have stores there.
For instance
, H&M stores in Soudi are just in the three main cities because the company has a limited budget for each country. And that led to creates different solutions like shipping, but because of the terrible streets ,
there
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 most of the companies stopped their services in the countryside. In other words,
people
 who live there have to go to the city to buy their requirements. In conclusion, there are many negative points to living in the countryside because you will spend extra
time
 buying anything you want or doing any activity.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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