The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant.
The presented table compares
differerent
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different
data about the method of
railroad
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in the underground of the six towns,
such
as
London
, Paris,
Tokyo
, Washington DC, Kyoto, and
Los
Angeles
.
Overall
, a glance at the figure provided reveals that
London
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the London
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route had the longest railway,
although
it was the earliest opened, and
Tokyo
trains could transport more passengers than the others. Based on the report,
London
was the first city that opened the underground railway systems in 1863,
while
in the next two
centuries
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the railroads were just implemented in
Los
Angeles
. The length of the train in
London
(394 km) was almost twofold
than
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that
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Paris
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,
Tokyo
, and Washington DC (199, 155, and 126 km),
whereas
Los
Angeles
and Kyoto routes were the shortest than the others at 28 and 11 km respectively.
On the other hand
,
Tokyo
and Paris trains transported
a
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numerous
of
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people in a year with more than 1000
million
passengers, which those were approximately two times than
London
at just only 775
million
, and
then
were
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almost ten times than Washington DC
in
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at
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144
million
.
Moreover
,
Los
Angeles
and Kyoto
also
became the least among all categories with below 50
million
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words london, tokyo, los, angeles, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railway
  • kilometers of route
  • passengers per year
  • extensive network
  • age of the system
  • analyze
  • correlation
  • outliers
  • notable comparisons
  • trends
  • commuter volume
  • inauguration date
  • modernization
  • historic
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • operate
  • transportation hub
  • utilization
  • frequency of service
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