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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented table compares
differerent
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different
 data about the method of
railroad
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the railroad
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 in the underground of the six towns,
such
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 as
London
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, Paris,
Tokyo
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, Washington DC, Kyoto, and
Los
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Angeles
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.
Overall
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, a glance at the figure provided reveals that
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London
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the London
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 route had the longest railway,
although
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 it was the earliest opened, and
Tokyo
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 trains could transport more passengers than the others. Based on the report,
London
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 was the first city that opened the underground railway systems in 1863,
while
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 in the next two
centuries
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 the railroads were just implemented in
Los
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Angeles
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. The length of the train in
London
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 (394 km) was almost twofold
than
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Paris
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of Paris
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,
Tokyo
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, and Washington DC (199, 155, and 126 km),
whereas
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Los
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Angeles
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 and Kyoto routes were the shortest than the others at 28 and 11 km respectively.
On the other hand
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,
Tokyo
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 and Paris trains transported
a
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numerous
of
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people in a year with more than 1000
million
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 passengers, which those were approximately two times than
London
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 at just only 775
million
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, and
then
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were
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almost ten times than Washington DC
in
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at
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 144
million
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.
Moreover
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,
Los
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Angeles
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 and Kyoto
also
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 became the least among all categories with below 50
million
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, tokyo, los, angeles, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railway
  • kilometers of route
  • passengers per year
  • extensive network
  • age of the system
  • analyze
  • correlation
  • outliers
  • notable comparisons
  • trends
  • commuter volume
  • inauguration date
  • modernization
  • historic
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • operate
  • transportation hub
  • utilization
  • frequency of service
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