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It will be better for both society and individuals is driverless cars - cars can drive themselves- become more widely used. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is indisputable that technology is rapidly developing more than ever before, especially in the field of transportation, self-driving
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 have emerged and become a topic of public interest.
People
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 assert that they can benefit from autonomous
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 to
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 extent
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 and that these
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 should become more popular.
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 viewpoint may have several disadvantages, I believe that its advantages could be more pronounced. On the one hand, driverless
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 do have their downside alongside the upside. When robotic
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 become widely recognized and used, they would be responsible for the loss of jobs for drivers. Several surveys have shown that a significant number of households are relying on driving jobs to make a living or raise their family.
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, without the need for drivers, they are likely to face unemployment.
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, autonomous
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 may encounter engine malfunctions, leading to causing accidents or car crashes. When these vehicles occur issues, it could be a challenging task for
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 inside the car to solve the problem.
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, despite the aforementioned drawbacks, I contend that the advantages of
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self-driving
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 offer both humans and society numerous advantages. As auto-driven
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 are equipped with advanced technologies, they could optimize routes, speed, and acceleration.
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, resulting in a decrease in greenhouse gas emissions, that could contribute to tackling one of the pressing issues of the world.
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, making use of
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cars
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 could help
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 save an amount of time. Especially for busy
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,
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can
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utilise
 the time when automated
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 are driving
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 to complete their assignments, and deadlines or to relax. In conclusion,
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 autonomous vehicles can cause some engine errors or lead to
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 unemployment rate, their positive impact possibly could be widely attained public recognization.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • artificial intelligence
  • advanced sensors
  • alleviate
  • enhance
  • streamline
  • revolutionize
  • minimize
  • mitigate
  • optimize
  • eco-friendly
  • sustainable
  • urbanization
  • traffic flow
  • transportation infrastructure
  • carbon emissions
  • accessibility
  • independence
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