In many countries, women and men both work full-time. It is logical for men and women to share household chores equally (eg. cleaning and looking after children). To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

These days in many countries, both
women
and men work
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full-time
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and it is a basic thing that they should divide
household
chores
equally. From my point of view, I totally agree with
this
statement for many seasons. In the following paragraphs, the reasons to support my agreement will be outlined in detail.
To begin
with, most elders believe that
household
chores
are a responsibility of
women
because in the past, all men needed to go out for working and there were not much
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offered to
women
, leading to
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to
stayed
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home and cleaned the house.
As a result
,
this
ancient mindset
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effected
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to
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many people nowadays.
On the contrary
, family
chores
such
as cleaning houses, washing dishes and cooking should be shared
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every people in
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house, especially if all of them work full-time.
In addition
,
household
chores
are not only cleaning the house
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but
also
looking after children. To illustrate, both father and mother should spend time with their children equally since it causes a good relationship between family.
Consequently
, when those kids grow up, they will not feel that they lack
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family bonds. Another
advantages
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of sharing
household
chores
is that the family could have activities together
instead
of watching television or playing games,
also
it leads to a strong family bond .
Furthermore
, the
chores
would finish faster if they help each
others
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. To summarize, I personally agree with
this
viewpoint that the
household
chores
should be shared equally for both men and
women
including children.
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