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Some parents believe that reading entertainment books is a waste of time. In their opinion, children should read only serious, educational books. Do you agree or dis agree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own experience.

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Few parents think that reading entertainment
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 is a loss of time.
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 them, children must read only serious educational
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. I agree with
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 statement.
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, reading informational journals broadens a child’s knowledge about a particular subject that they are reading.
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, if someone is going through a book on different types of animals on the planet, they will upskill their knowledge about that particular topic will be enhanced.
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, serious articles will help improve
kid’s
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 language particularly if the article is in
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 most of the work contains either formal or semi-formal
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 language
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 to entertainment
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 which are informal.
English
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 is a major language used world wide
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 if one goes aboard or to some other place where two different native speakers meet
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English
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 is a life saver. Children can learn vocabulary grammar spelling and sentence structure.
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, educational readings can teach one good values and virtues which should be incorporated into kids from a young age so when they grow, they practice good values and become decent individuals.
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, reading entertainment
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 is just a loss of time, children can watch cartoons
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 of reading these
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 when they need a break from formal reading they can opt for television for a change.
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