The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011
The pie graph depicts the proportion of households who lived in owned and rented accommodations in the United Kingdom from 1918 to 2011.
Overall
, the maximum percentage of households in rented accommodation
in the first year, but after that it followed downward
trend.
In the year 1918, almost 78% of individuals lived in rented Add an article
a downward
accommodation
, whereas
approximately 26% of British was stayed
in owned Change to the active voice
stayed
has stayed
accommodation
. In contrast
, just above 30% of people of
England used to stay in owned houses, Change preposition
in
while
it was alomost
twofold in Correct your spelling
almost
case
of rented Correct article usage
the case
accommodation
in 1939. The percentage of People who live in rented and owned accommodation
was near
about a century Change the word
nearly
was
collectively in 1961. Surprisingly, in 1971, when both types of residential Unnecessary verb
apply
accommodation
popularity were similar.
Moreover
, the households owning and renting accommodation
was 60% and 40% in 1981, respectively. After a decade, owned accommodation
increased by nearly 8%, however
rented decreased by almost Add the comma(s)
,however
same
. Correct article usage
the same
Lastly
, in 2011, the popularity of owned accommodation
was near about 64% and 36% of rented accommodation
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words accommodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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