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People ’s character is influenced by environment rather than genetics. Do you agree or disagree?

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From decades ago, human behaviour was affected by the place where they inhabit there and their genes. I firmly believe that the impact of the environment is much more than genetics, in
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 opinion. Some people believe that human behaviour is impacted by the people who surround them.
Parents
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 are the first people whom children interact with them, so in my ,opinion
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 should be careful about their treatment in front of their children because kids are like parrots and repeat everything
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 do and say. Not only
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 friends, classmates, and relatives have influenced kids. For these reasons,
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 when they have children, are very cautious about their habitat. They prefer to choose the quarter where it is a safe and non-crime place. Another convincing reason for the fact of the impact of environment is more than genetics, is that
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 the twins have the same genes and more specifically, the same DNAs, they are totally different in character and treatment.
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 of them maybe is hard-working but the other
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 is not, and prefers to lie down, surfing on the Internet. Or
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 of them maybe is talkative and outgoing but the other
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 is shy. In conclusion, it is obvious that genetics has influenced humans too, but the effect of environment and nature is much more
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