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Some people say that only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
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The table demonstrates how citizens in seven age
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 of Someland opt to spend their free
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 annually.
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, it can be clearly seen that the total
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 spent watching television or videos was the highest,
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 cinema was the least popular activity among people aged below sixty and
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 exercising in those aged sixty and above.
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 with, teenagers and young adults spent the highest amount of
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, 1200
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 and 700
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 respectively, watching television or videos.
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, the total
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 spent on socializing by both age
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 was exactly the same at 350
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 when they were with a
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 of four or more members and only 150
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 with the smaller
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. Turning to the
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 of individuals who are in their 30s, 40, and 50s, they spent the majority of their
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 watching television and videos which was
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 of 400, 500, and 600
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, respectively. Those amounts were twenty-fold higher than the
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 they spent going to the cinema.
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, senior citizens in both
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 and 70s age
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 had similar
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 spent in two activities, including 200
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, in total, socializing with
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 of up to four members
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 25
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 when the
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 that had additional people. Interestingly, they did not attend any
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 exercise or sport throughout the recorded year.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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