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Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noising and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example for your own knowledge or experience

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Education is a long learning process and
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 are future generations. Schools are
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' homes where they spend more than half of their life and become knowledgeable there. Indiscipline
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 are troublemakers and disrupt the educational environment.
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, some people think that
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 who are disobedient could be separated into one group separately. It disagrees because for several reasons which I explain below: First of all, schools are the main sources for learning and educating
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. If troublemaker
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 separate into a group, they will continue their bad
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.
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, they gain extra unwanted
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.
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, if one of the
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 smoking a cigarette, will have negative consequences and some of them will become a smoker.
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, if noising or disobedient
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 are mixed with discipline
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, they will learn new good
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 from them, become educated
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, and will not persist in the bad
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.
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, the rate of positive values will be increased based on recent studies which showed that discipline
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 are affected positively by discipline
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 during school life learning. To summarise the effects of noisy
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 on the educational environment, separating indiscipline
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 into one group will not be solved the issue.
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,
it is clear that
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 the idea of grouping noising
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 is not supported,
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, they should be grouped together and make some new learning activities.
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