Once children start school,teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development.To what extent fo you agree or disagree?

in the current ,scenario most of the parents are in jobs and they are unable to spend their time with them. so, the students spend their time with school and tuition teachers. I eye to eye in the upcoming paragraphs
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will discuss relevant reasons.
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, it is true that teachers played a significant role in every learner's life. one
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reasons are that students expend a lot of time with them and have trust in their tuition. so, they started their all habits which may be good or bad and
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, they can guide them to achieve success in their life, because they know their strength and
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, in the modern era technology has played a vital role
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they are more connected with social media
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of teachers. so, they adapt to the wrong things that affect their life and future.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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