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Some people believe that travelling alone is the best way to experience a country or a culture. Others feel that it is better to travel with people you know. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Travelling without a doubt is a wonderful way of exploring both world and life whatsoever. It gives us a proper insight into many different cultures. With that being said, an obvious part of
such
 a journey is company. An ability to make lavish memories with closest friends is something clearly blissful.
However
, there is a group of people who believes that solo travelling is to die for. They describe it as the most wonderful way to get to know about the foreign ground. As every side consists of pros and cons I will discuss both views. Going anywhere on
one
's own will never be as fun as being with
one
's peers. Being among others is equipping anyone with lots of amazing moments.
Not to mention
 how much it cements
one
's bond with each other. It leads to unproblematic cooperation on both short and far-away trips. Because of that it is easier to make the whole plan of the adventure in advance. With that being said it allows you to visit every place
that is
 listed beforehand on the list
for example
.
Moreover
, every participant in the travel may have different emotions after all the attractions which enriches the whole situation.
Whereas
 being alone might be beneficial, as ,in fact, oneself have a chance to interpret everything only to
one
 liking,
therefore
one
 will not face any possible criticism from the other side that can be unpleasant at a particular moment. All in all, I believe that going through life in a group, especially
while
 being somewhere else, is much more satisfying since you will always have someone by your side that will share those moments with you for the rest of your life. It is truly a blessing to be around
one
 that shares the same passions, outlooks and morals
while
 being
elsewhere
, learning about numerous cultures and ethnicities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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