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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for telhe environment. What damages does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by government and individuals to solve this problem?

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There are wide varieties of
plastic
 materials
such
 as bags, bottles and packaging which contaminate the environment. In
this
 essay, I intend to say some trouble of these facilities and
then
 illustrate the solution to
this
 problem through folk and administration authorities. There are several draws back for
this
 material especially for the environment. Based on the majority of research plastics remind in the habitat for more than 1000 years so, there are several problems for plants and animals in the long run. Every year, a remarkable number of animals die in the forest or desert because they eat some kind of
plastic
instead
 of feed.
Additionally
, many commentators justifiably argue that the amount of plant growth has a significant decline in the land where suffering from
plastic
 garbage. It seems to me; governments and mankind have a particular duty to control
this
 problem. The government are able to alter recyclable, biodegradable or compostable with
plastic
. If the administrative authority wants to develop
this
 logic, they will force to encourage the
plastic
manufactory
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 to use these materials with
drop
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a drop
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of
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 the expenditure on renewable sources.
Besides
, we are unable to no consider
that
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 effect of people
to emit
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this
 problem. If the folk collected their waste in the rubbish after the camp in nature, the amount of
plastic
 will decline dramatically. In conclusion, the chief problems of
plastic
 waste in the environment are
death
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the death
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 of animals and plants fall. In my personal opinion, the government must force
the
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companies to change their materials with renewable sources and individuals should gather the rubbish from nature.
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