many countries are spending a huge of money on supporting their competitors to take part in some worldwide sports competitions. others argue that it would be better if these countries could spend the money on children to take part in sports. to what extent do you agree or disagree

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There are different countries all around the world that finance and sustain professional athletes in important global

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competitions.

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someone believes it is a good habit,

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others think that rich states should support children economically in order to introduce them to a healthy globe. In my opinion, a state should invest in both, agonistic and recreational

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, and in

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,essay I will explain why.

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with, countries should support

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champions even if they are not from those nations. Actually, they should invest more in athletes of different nationalities to increase and feed the sane

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sphere, which is an inclusive and healthy environment

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characterised by an open mentality.

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players should be treated as an example of determination, a sense of duty and sacrifice,

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they should be respected, estimated and glorified.

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stimulate children to play

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. It is not just to find new talents, but

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to give the youngest part of the population the possibility to play a game without grave on the family's economic support.

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be considered a school of life.

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, teens learn how to play together and to respect the rules imposed by a mister or a society.

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avoid several healthy and mental problems,

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as obesity. In conclusion, I believe that a country should finance both, professional

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players and children that want to take part in a team or would like to meet a new passion, without considering them as competitors or foreign people. In

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way, a positive and against racism message with a healthy background will be sent to the

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world.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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