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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates the number of citizens in percentage.
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 data is organised by four states,
India
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,
China
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, USA and Japan.
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, it can be inferred from the graph that
China
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 was the first in ranking for the two analysed years, but
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 trend will change following the prediction made for 2050.
China
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 and
India
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 were and will be the two most populated states, in
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China
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 had more than 20% of people living in it during 1950,
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India
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 had 15% of the global beings.
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 trend did not change in 2002, because
China
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 dominated the global panorama with exactly 20% of the total, followed by
India
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 with a percentage a bit higher than 15%. The two nations both followed a linear trend, one growing and the other decreasing.
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 USA and Japan kept the same path, even if they were the third and the fourth player with numbers around a third of
India
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 and less than 5% of the total respectively.
According to
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 the prediction
India
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 will increase its citizens, gaining almost 20% of the world population. Oppositely,
China
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 will lose points in percentage, dropping around 15%. Differently, the USA will be constant, like in 2020, and Japan will decrease its individual, almost touching 0%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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