Many people say that the internet is the most important invention ever. Do you agree or disagree with this and if not, what do you believe to be more important?

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many people believe that the invention of the
internet
is most important than others, I think in a reverse manner and disagree with the given statement. My inclination is justified in the following paragraph. Out of all the arguments, the strongest one to prove my opinion is
electricity
, which is the most important one.
This
is to say all the devices that are used to access the
internet
need
electricity
to operate. A good example of
this
is a mobile phone.
Besides
this
, it is
also
true that
electricity
is not even used for
this
kind of
devices
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but it is
also
used to run motors in factories, cars, tractors and so on. By
this
I mean, it makes human life better than before ever. The other reason to prove my point is
bulb
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because it is believed that
this
is the best thing that ever happen to mankind.
In addition
, the fact that bulbs use
electricity
as well. It is
also
logical that without
electricity
, it is difficult to see at night.
Thus
, to wrap up the discussion, it can be said that despite some people giving more importance to the
internet
, my reasons that
electricity
needed
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for the
internet
are logically acceptable.
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