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Many people say that the internet is the most important invention ever. Do you agree or disagree with this and if not, what do you believe to be more important?

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 many people believe that the invention of the
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 is most important than others, I think in a reverse manner and disagree with the given statement. My inclination is justified in the following paragraph. Out of all the arguments, the strongest one to prove my opinion is
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, which is the most important one.
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 is to say all the devices that are used to access the
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 need
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 to operate. A good example of
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 is a mobile phone.
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, it is
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 true that
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 is not even used for
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 kind of
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 but it is
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 used to run motors in factories, cars, tractors and so on. By
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 I mean, it makes human life better than before ever. The other reason to prove my point is
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 because it is believed that
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 is the best thing that ever happen to mankind.
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, the fact that bulbs use
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 as well. It is
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 logical that without
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, it is difficult to see at night.
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, to wrap up the discussion, it can be said that despite some people giving more importance to the
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, my reasons that
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needed
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 for the
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 are logically acceptable.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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