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The UN has recently celebrated their 70th anniversary, What benefits has it bought during this time? Do you think the UN will last next 70 years?

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Established after
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World
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War
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 2, the United
Nations
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, or the UN, has existed for 70 years.
Although
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 it is not the first international
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, it has contributed remarkably to the
peace
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 and development of the
world
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. In spite of
this
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 contribution, I believe that the UN can soon disappear. During its
last
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 70 years, the United
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 is
the
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organization
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 which has positive contributions to the international community.
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as said, the
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 was established after
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World
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 2. The purpose of
this
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 establishment was to remain
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peace
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 in the whole
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 when during
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half of the 20th century, humanity had to undergo two
world
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 wars. In spite of the Cold
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 and regional wars
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 as the 1999 Balkan
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, the 2003 invasion of Iraq and the ongoing Ukraine-Russia
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, in general, the international community has not seen any potential sign of a new
world
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war
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. Meanwhile, the predecessor of the United
Nations
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, the League of
Nations
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, could not deal with the rise of fascism, the main cause of
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War
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 2. Because of
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, over about a quarter of
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 after its establishment, the league was dissolved in 1946. These points prove that the United
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 has successfully remain
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international
peace
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.
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, the role of the
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 does not stop that since it
also
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 encourages the development of other aspects
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 humanity
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 as economy,
education
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, culture and human
rights
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.
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, the Food and Agriculture
Organization
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, or FAO,
in
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resposible
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responsible
 for solving
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food security problems and guaranteeing people in the
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 do not have to face
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 effects of famine.
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, the United
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Education
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, Scientific and Cultural
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, or UNESCO, advocates for
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cultural diversity and the ubiquity of
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, especially
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elementary
education
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. Another significant constituent
organization
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 of the UN is the Office of
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the High
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 Commissioner for Human
Rights
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, or OHCHR,
concerns
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about
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the
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human
rights
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 activities around the
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 and the oppressive ways governments and authorities use to restrict these
rights
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.
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 the United
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 has
such
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contribution
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 to the international community, I personally think that
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organization
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 will go
to
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the
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collapse soon. The main reason for it is the
conflict
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 between great powers. Even though the United
Nations
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 has existed for 70 years, it can not cover the fundamental disagreement between great countries.
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, in the United
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 Security Council, or UNSC, there are five
pernament
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permanent
 member countries, the United States, the United Kingdom, France, Russia and China. They were the winner in
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World
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War
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 2 and they hoped the
peace
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 of the
world
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 can be retained in the following time.
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, the
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 between
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 never
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cooled down, from the Cold
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 to the present. In general, all five countries have the right
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 veto the suggestion of each other and unfortunately,
this
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 right is usually used for their own benefits rather than the general problems.
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, when the United States suggested
their
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 would be punishments
to
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 the government of Nicolas Maduro in Venezuela because of his activities against the protesters,
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 France and the United Kingdom agreed, Russia and China vetoed. If the UNSC cannot solve the
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 between great powers, one day, it can be dissolved and the whole United
Nations
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 can go to an end es remaining the
peace
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 of the
world
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 is its principal function. In conclusion,
although
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 the contributions of the United
Nations
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 are remarkable and worth mentioning, the
organization
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 will collapse soon
due to
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 the
conflict
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 between great powers.
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