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The table gives information about the amount of money in developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010.

The table gives information about the amount of money in developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010.
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The table gives information about the amount of
money
 in developing
countries
 by the
USA
, EU
countries
 and other
countries
 from 2006 to 2010. In general, It is noticeable that the figure for
money
 in these developing
countries
 witnessed a dramatic growth during the whole
periods
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period
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 shown. The
USA
 which had
amount
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the amount
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 of
money
 hit the highest point in 2010. There was a 3.1 of
million
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millions
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 of dollars in the year 2006 in the EU. In the first year, the figure
of
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for
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money
 in the
USA
 started at 9.8. In the next four years, that in the
USA
 and EU was a rocket with figures of 20.3, and 4.1 respectively.
Therefore
 the total
of
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money
 in the
USA
peak
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 at 20.3 in 2010. The
least
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last
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 figure for
money
 was the Other
countries
 in the year 2006. The total of
money
 in Other
countries
 had risen to 3.5 by 2008, which was a decline to 3.2 in 2009.
At the end
 of
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the years
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years
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year
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, a significant increase to 3.7 was seen in the amount of
money
 in Other
countries
.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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