The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the sun.
The diagram demonstrates how the
heat
from the sun stays in the atmosphere. The heat
energy
comes from the sun, and the other heat
energy
comes from the activities of people. Some part of the heat
energy
reflects the space, but some are not. Some of it stays on the earth in the atmosphere, and it is trapped in the greenhouse. Then
the heat
energy
will be used.
Human activities such
as cutting trees, transportation, using private vehicles, and the process of factory production are the reasons that cause greenhouse gases.
Overall
, the heat
energy
comes from the sun, and the other heat
energy
comes from the activities of people. Some of the heat
energy
reflects in the space, and some is trapped in the greenhouse. The heat
energy
can be used for doing something elseSubmitted by dondollaraus on
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