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Technological innovations have negatively affected our lives. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely believed technological
innovation
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 has affected our lives. Personally, I can neither completely agree nor disagree with
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 statement for a variety of reasons. I party agree that technology has benefited
very
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us very
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 more in our life. One of the main reasons can be that technological
innovation
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 help
give
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people
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 very many knowledge about education.
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example
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, the children can learn math on youtube because they don’t understand in class or they feel don’t enough and when the children learn on youtube, they learn more good knowledge than in class. Another reason can be that technological
innovations
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 can help
people
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disposal
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work
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of work
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 easily and fastly.
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, Microsoft
create
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 Excel which
help
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people
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 can statistical data on business or statistic on
days
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the days
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work
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of work
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 of an employee,etc... On the order hand,
i
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 disagree with the view that technological
innovations
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 make affect
people
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’s life.
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, technological
innovations
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 are a place
too
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for too
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 much toxic
information
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 and bad program spam
everywhere
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is everywhere
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 on social media.
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, when technological
innovations
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 develop strong
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then
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than
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 toxic
information
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 or bad education make
effect
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affect
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children,
they
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and they
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 will learn negative everything.
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, when technological
innovation
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 develops
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 places hackers attack to
information
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 of the government.
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example
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, when
people
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 create very AI
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 hackers use AI to attack to
information
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 business of
government
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the government
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 or flinch military data and they will buy
information
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 for every
countries
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country
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. In conclusion,
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 technological
innovation
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 is necessary for
people
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’s lives, I’m convinced that
people
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 must learn more about technology and they must use it in a useful way.

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