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Space travel has been possible for some time. Some people think space tourism could be developed in the future which can help to develop countries' economies

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Nowadays, human beings' thirst for knowledge is no longer confined to the planet we live on but expands to boundless outer
space
. Some people believe that
space
travel
 will develop in the future and power economic growth.
Nevertheless
, in my point of view, the negative effects outweigh the positive effects. First of all,
space
travel
 can be devastating to people's health because of the various radiation it contains. These radiations can not only hurt our surface skin but
also
 mutate our genes.
Therefore
,
space
travel
 affects not only ourselves but
also
 the next generations, which can be quite distressing since those side effects may not be exposed until our future generations actually suffer from them.
However
, it will be too late
then
 to remedy the mistakes we have made.
In addition
,
space
travel
 may trigger conflicts among different nations.
Firstly
,
space
travel
 can be an excuse for national espionage, which may threaten national security. Nowadays, countries pay much attention to national security and confidentiality and distaste for being spied on.
Thus
, it would be better not to turn
space
travel
 into a way of national espionage.
Secondly
,
space
travel
 may incur a
space
 race among different nations, which might drag down the economy considering the high cost of
space
 exploration. In
this
 way, countries may rush to invest more funds into
space
instead
 of trying to solve their more urgent domestic affairs. In conclusion, it is true that
space
travel
 can satisfy our curiosity about outer
space
.
Nevertheless
,
this
 benefit can not match the numerous hazards brought by
space
travel
.
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