You have recently visited a city on vacation and stayed in a hotel. Write a letter to the manager about your stay. In your letter: Give details of your stay What were the high & low points of the hotel What are your suggestions; recommendations and / or complaints about the hotel Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .....................,

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Dear manager, I am Shruti Bhiwde, I would like to express my thoughts to you about my stay in your hotel. It was a delightful experience I had for 3 days of stay, your staff was well mannered and respectful towards me.
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, the sports centre was top-notch with all the amenities included
such
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as a gym and having a good space for a workout with a perfect view.
However
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, there is something I feel you should know is that
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the swimming pool was not properly cleaned.
Also
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, the water had a weird smell, like it had not been changed for a
while
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.
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, several menu items were unavailable for two straight days, including a minimum amount of vegetarian options.
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, a very basic need of a human nowadays is smooth internet service, which was lacking for my whole stay in your hotel.
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of these incidents, it was a step back for me not to give you the best review in my regards, but I simply couldn't ignore the good stuff I had. It would be really great if you could work on
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small errors, which can cause harm to your guests in the future. I will surely visit your hotel in the near future. Best regards, Shruti Bhiwde
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Try to organize your paragraphs more effectively with clear topic sentences and supporting details for each point. For example, dedicate one paragraph to high points, one to low points, and another for suggestions or recommendations.
coherence cohesion
Ensure you include a closing salutation that matches the opening greeting in formality.
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Make sure to fully develop each point with adequate explanation, expansion and examples, particularly when suggesting improvements.
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Maintain a consistent and suitable tone throughout the letter; it should be respectful but also convey any dissatisfaction clearly and politely.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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