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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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No one in the right mind can contest the argument that owning a house is better than renting it. I am inclined to believe that owning a place to live in is the most important part of
life
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 with, I truly believe that buying a
property
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 is the best investment, no matter which country you live in.
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, it is more challenging to buy one in some countries like Iran as you need to pay the whole price in cash. In countries
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Canada
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 the economy is strong enough to provide loans for buyers.
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, one could purchase a
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 with a small down payment and pay the rest of the amount as monthly instalments. Another paramount factor that needs to be considered is that rents tend to increase year after year and
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 means stress and anxiety for
people
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 who live in rented places. They have to cut out some expenses to meet the ends. Ultimately
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life
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 quality decreases day by day and
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life
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 dissatisfaction increases.
People
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 feel more secure in their
owned
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property
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 as they do not have to deal with the aforementioned problems.
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, buying a house or an apartment would be stressful for some
people
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 as they cannot afford it. If we consider
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 matter as an important aspect of
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 for everyone, it takes away joy from some
people
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’s
life
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. They struggle all their
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 to own a
property
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 without enjoying a bit of it. On the basis of
aforementioned
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 reasons / reasons mentioned above, I am convinced that
people
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 should invest their money in a
property
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 if they can afford it rather than waste it on
rents
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.
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, it is not applicable to everyone’s lifestyle.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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