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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information about the changing
number
 of
travelers
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travellers
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 who visited Caribbean islands in a seven-year span, measured in millions of
visitors
.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the total
number
 of
visitors
 and
people
 who stayed on boats showed a positive trend,
while
travelers
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travellers
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 who chose to reside inside the island experienced the opposite. To commence with, the total comers and
people
 who opted to live
in
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on
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 a cruise had an increasing trend. Starting at 1
million
visitors
, the total
visitors
Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
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 increased steadily before reaching around 2.7
million
visitors
 and peaking at 3.5
million
at the end
 of the period.
Furthermore
, the
people
 who stayed
in
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on
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 cruise ships
also
 showed an increased
number
 of
travelers
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travellers
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. Having stood at around 0.3
million
, it rose marginally to 0.5
million
 before falling to 03
million
 and soaring to 2
million
 in 2017, 0.5
million
 higher than
visitors
 who stayed on the island.
However
,
people
 who chose to stay on Caribbean islands had a decreased
number
 of
visitors
.
Started
Wrong verb form
Starting
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 at just above 5
million
 in 2010, it climbed to 1.5
million
 in 2013 and remained steady for the next following two years before falling to around 1.2
million
 and
increased
Wrong verb form
increasing
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 marginally to 1.5
million
visitors
 in 2017.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "marginally" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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