Many people think modem communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?

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discussed questions nowadays stated as, are the breakthroughs in medical science the most significant advances in our world over 200 years? It is undeniable that going to the hospital at least time a year has become an essential part of our life.
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our lifespan, so many people just
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Earth.
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cures us from diseases that
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of The Earth was approximately 2
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in our life. On
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hand, some people claim that other inventions made
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humankind.
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our world.
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on society, which is one of the
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arguments of teens. The explanation lies in the fact that with
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field would not be created. And of
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we can't say that
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no influence on our world. In conclusion, I would argue that medical science made a lot for us, but we accept it as given and do not give much attention to it, even though we can't turn a blind eye
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breakthroughs in physics.
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