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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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As an introduction,
art
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 is unique to every country
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 and holds an immense value in the culture of particular parts of the world. A fair amount of people nowadays believe that the
government
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 should not spend an excessive amount of money on
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,
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 of spending on other necessities of the country. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the idea considering the current economical crisis.
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 with, there are many reasons, why the financial priority should be the basic needs.
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, thousands of people are living in poverty without having the opportunity in basic needs of life
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 as food, health, and education.
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, currently,the
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 has cut down the annual allocation for hospitals and schools, which of course, is a harmful decision in the face of civilians.
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, the money can be spent on programmes which are important in the development.
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, the exportation of products like tea, rubber and coconut can be promoted by funding adequately in order to enhance income.
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 is invaluable,
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 it needs an adequate amount of money, not in excess.
Art
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 varies with the culture and civilisation of societies, and it has its own value. It is the best source of generating revenue income for the
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. Museums,
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 galleries, and musical concerts are the place, where a handsome revenue is taken.
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, the
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 is responsible for protecting
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 masterpieces and should do it carefully by not compromising other necessities. In conclusion, in my opinion,
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 should be protected, but basic needs must be the priority when allocating funds.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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