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Some people say that all secondary and higher secondary school students should be taught how to manage money as it is an important life skill. Do you agree or disagree with this argument?

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Money
management
 is an important
skill
 to learn, So everyone should know how to manage her/his
money
 not only children's is
skill
 should be taught to everyone,
Therefore
 I strongly agree with
this
 argument.
Firstly
, talking about why should everyone know
money
management
. It's an important
life
skill
 to balance our
life
 we should know how to manage
money
 or we can say how we can save
money
.
for
example
:, A father or A mother they are the best
example
 for
money
management
 what they earn they divide tnto several parts like childrens school fee, they buy house accessories and they save
money
 for future,
therefore
 parents are the best
example
 of
money
management
.
secondly
, talking about secondary and higher secondary school
students
 should be taught how to manage
money
, i strongly agree with argument
students
 should taught
money
management
skill
, it will make them understand the value of
money
 for rest of the
life
.
For
example
:, if
students
 are not learning haw to manage
money
 he/she will be wasting
money
 rest of his/her
life
,
therefore
 shudents should know and learn
money
management
 as important
life
skill
 to balance their
life
. I came to the Conclusion, school
students
 should learn about
money
management
 for their upcoming future because it is an very important
life
skill
 there schould be balance among the
life
.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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