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Some people say that all secondary and higher secondary school students should be taught how to manage money as it is an important life skill. Do you agree or disagree with this argument?

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Money
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management
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 is an important
skill
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 to learn, So everyone should know how to manage her/his
money
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 not only children's is
skill
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 should be taught to everyone,
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 I strongly agree with
this
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 argument.
Firstly
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, talking about why should everyone know
money
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management
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. It's an important
life
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skill
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 to balance our
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 we should know how to manage
money
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 or we can say how we can save
money
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.
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example
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:, A father or A mother they are the best
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 for
money
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management
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 what they earn they divide tnto several parts like childrens school fee, they buy house accessories and they save
money
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 for future,
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 parents are the best
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 of
money
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management
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.
secondly
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, talking about secondary and higher secondary school
students
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 should be taught how to manage
money
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, i strongly agree with argument
students
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 should taught
money
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management
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skill
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, it will make them understand the value of
money
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 for rest of the
life
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.
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example
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:, if
students
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 are not learning haw to manage
money
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 he/she will be wasting
money
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 rest of his/her
life
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,
therefore
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 shudents should know and learn
money
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management
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 as important
life
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skill
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 to balance their
life
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. I came to the Conclusion, school
students
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 should learn about
money
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management
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 for their upcoming future because it is an very important
life
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skill
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 there schould be balance among the
life
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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