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Examine the arguments in favour and against animal experiments, and come to a conclusion on this issue.

#arguments #favour #experiments #conclusion
Nowadays, there is
a
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 increased awareness
on
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 animal rights. But can
sacrifising
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sacrificing
 of
animals
 mean saving
life
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? In
this
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 I will look into the advantages and disadvantages of animal
experiments
, and why, in my opinion, the advantages overseeds surpass the negative sides. The advances in the medical field give us the possibility of treating illnesses that were considered a death sentence in the past. Examples are drugs curing cancer and complex genetic and neurological diseases. Drug
experiments
 and production
is
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 subject to a strict
regiment
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, including
experiments
 in labs on cells and
animals
.
Hence
, these trials on
animals
 give a tremendous health gain for
human
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humans
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.
Furthermore
, in farming, new technology has made
production
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the production
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 of meat and dairy products more efficient. In turn, a larger amount of
a
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 local population will benefit from
such
 measures, coping with poverty, high prices and hunger in some places. For the better good,
animals
 have to be
sacrifised
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sacrificed
 in the development of
more
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 efficient ecosystem. In the meanwhile,
animals
 are living creatures with feelings.
Experiments
 on
animals
 in the past, have
showed
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 the
crulty
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cruelty
 of humans
,
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 when there was no limit
the
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 types of pain-causing
experiments
.
Animals
 should be treated the same way a human would be treated. In conclusion,
experiments
 on
animals
 allow human development, including reducing mortality and morbidity,
as well as
 solving hunger and shortage of food.
In contrast
, the
experiments
 harm
animals
in
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 causing pain and distress, and may
ultimatly
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ultimately
 extinct species. All in all, despite the potential abuse of
animals
, the beneficial effects of animal
experiments
 are far greater in my opinion.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • controversial
  • prevalence
  • scientific research
  • proponents
  • opponents
  • medical breakthroughs
  • vaccines
  • treatments
  • critical data
  • regulatory frameworks
  • ethical guidelines
  • minimize suffering
  • moral objections
  • animal rights
  • species differences
  • unreliable results
  • alternatives to animal testing
  • in vitro testing
  • computer modeling
  • volunteer microdosing
  • nuanced
  • complexity
  • weighing
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