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Some people think that student which selected academic subject who attend to the university should study subject as science and technology. give your openion

#people #student #university #study #science #technology #openion
Some people think that
student
 which selected academic
subject
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 who attend
to
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the
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university should study
subject
 as
science
 and technology. In my opinion university
student
 should have
an
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 ability to select the
subject
 base on their knowledge and they can think
what
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 they want.
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one
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the one
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 hand people think that
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science
 and technology
subject
are
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demand
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in demand
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category
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categories
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 in
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higher education.
Firstly
,
science
 base degree holders have more carrier opportunities
compare
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 to
other
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another subject category
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subject
 category. Even
oversees
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 job opportunities
also
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are also
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 open for
student
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students
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 who qualify for
science
 and technology.
However
, high
salary
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salaries
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also
 offer
to
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the
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science
 base jobs.
Therefore
 most
of
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the
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parents want to teach their children
for
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apply
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science
subject
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subjects
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 who don’t have
real
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a real
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 talent for it too.
On the other hand
, most of the
student
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students
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 have
varies
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skill
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skills
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according
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toaccording
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 their
favoration
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favouritism
. Teenagers should take their individual decision because
,
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 they know their entire life is depend on
this
 selection in the university.one day teenagers become
an adults
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adults
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 and they should take care of their family and they have separate life
structure
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structures
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,
hence
, all people want to spend their life happily without any stress and they want to earn
high
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a high
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wage
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wages
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. If
student
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students
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 have natural talent for ART or any other hand work they should learn
this
 because they can’t be a professional
for
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science
. In my opinion, all students can’t become a doctor or an engineer, but one person
have
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 special smart talent,
parents
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and parents
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 should encourage their child.it is possible to fill all the education
level
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levels
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 in the world. In conclusion, as an individual
person
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,person
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 they must follow all the
subject
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subjects
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 even though they have
ability
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the ability
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 to learn all the
subject
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subjects
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 with basic knowledge.
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