The chart below shows the amount of area used for growing grains between 1990 and 2010 in a state in canada.

The chart below shows the amount of area used for growing grains between 1990 and 2010 in a state in canada.
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As an introduction, the bar chart demonstrates how the land was allocated for the purpose of cultivating grains in a particular state in Canada, from 1990 to 2010.
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, it can be seen that the largest cultivated area of all fields
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the smallest was other lands.
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, plantations reduced significantly in the later stages compared to early years
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all places.
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, grain cultivation
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and other planes between 1990 and 2000 were approximately similar in numbers at 60, around 40 and 5 respectively,
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in 2010, the figures showed a slight decline by about 5, 14, and 2.5 from that of 2000, respectively. When considering spring planes,
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of acres of land used for
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was around 35 in 1990.
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figure went down by approximately 10 acres in 2000
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and remained relatively stable until 2010 at around 20.
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